Description
It is the recipe for a great narrative. Your job is to make the story a mind movie for your reader.
Last post, you learned how to detail a person, place, or thing. This post you'll learn another strategy.
Elaborating an event
You begin by selecting an important event from a piece of writing. Then elaborate on it. Elaborate means to tell more, to make it longer, to add details.
Example:
I took my dog for a walk.
Let's elaborate:
Last evening, I took a walk with my dog, Max. I usually take the same path so I can greet my neighbors and check on the miniature ponies in the choral a half mile down the road, but this time I chose I new route. Max and I turned south instead of north and walked toward the railroad tracks. Max is little more cautious when we veer from our usual route, his nose stays close to the ground, sniffing every rock, crevice, and pothole. We walk slower, taking in the new scenery. An abandoned dilapidated barn to my right, old boots dangled on the fence posts to my left. The sun begins to set. The air feels crisp. "Let's go home, Max," I command. He turns and we walk back. I believe I'll venture this direction again.
What is the difference between the two examples above?
